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1. On สิงหาคม 2nd, 2010 at 4:08 pm ying Says:

   อ. ฝนช่วยตรวจ IELTS essay ให้ด้วยได้มั้ยคะ

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   Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

   คำตอบค่ะ

   Wealthy nations should share their wealth to poorer nations. However, the government of the poorer nations must help themselves to make the better quality of life to their people. Asking and waiting for help could not solve the problem.

   In my opinion, the helping could be food, money, education, technologies, health care and knowledge for release their hardship. The first help should be food, medicine, money or clothes because these could go to poorer people fast and release their starvation and disease. Furthermore, the education, technologies, health care and knowledge should be shared among the poorer country. These could help them to develop their country sustainable. For example the Agriculture technologies or the Meteorological knowledge could increase the food production which providing enough food. Moreover, given the extend education and knowledge generate the better quality of life, social communication and economics. Sharing wealth among poorer nations not only decrease the hardship of human but also the demand of moral.
   Besides, the good thing will returns to wealthy nations as “the more you give, the more you get”. Since, the quality of life in the poorer country developed, the illegal immigration or criminal by the alien in developed country will decrease.

   Even though the poorer nations should be supported by other countries but the government must take their responsibility to develop their people’s quality of life. The received money must spend for the most urgent problems such as the basic human necessities, stabilize populations, and economic development that can alleviate poverty.

2. On สิงหาคม 4th, 2010 at 12:19 am Ajarnfon Says:

   My comments and suggestions are as follows:
   1. Be careful with the way you write the introduction. Bear in mind “don’t simply copy words or phrases” from the topic.
   2. The thesis statement is quite clear, but the following paragraphs seem to be conflicting.
   3. Some incorrect use of connecting words, such as “since”, “even though”
   4. Active / passive voice
   5. Punctuation like “,” must be used when necessary.
   For this one, the estimated band score is 5 – 5.5.
   Good luck kha!

3. On สิงหาคม 22nd, 2010 at 10:34 pm ying Says:

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   Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Other, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

   Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

   The person who committed the crime must get punishment. The offender should be punished for their crimes, its value as retribution is the good reason.

   Fixed punishments are proper if considering only the consequence of each type of crime. Fixed punishment could remind people what the punishment they will get. These could prevent some committing. For example, the robbery would be subject to the certain punishment because its result not only the victim but also spread out the fear for society. Fixed punishment will have a deterring effect of community. In addition, the penalty such as fine must be exactly. This deterring effect also provides the stability and security to society through minimizing the number of crimes committed.

   On the other hand, some of an individual crime committed accidentally or for self-defending. The circumstance and the motivation for committing should be taken into account when deciding the punishment equity. The accused should have a chance to convince the court or the jury the reason of the crime he was accused of. This mean that the court could look at why the person committed the crime before execute the penalty.

   For example if a person stole $100. There might be a fixed punishment a $10000 fine. Perhaps the person was committed because of the starvation or poor and needed the money for his child. In this case, if the court takes the circumstance and motivation into account, the person may not take his punishment but all he needs is held instead. Moreover, the offender who kills for self-defense cannot committed without the reason. A self-defense killing might be considering when a person reasonably believed that it is necessary in the circumstance for defense.

   In my opinion, murder cannot be compare with a self-defense killing. Fixed punishment execute to the murder is proper for retribution. The force of the law will provide the minimal criminal in our community. However, an individual crime such as the defense of oneself or another will be exempted from punishment.